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Atop a Hill not Far from Home by ~fluffythemonkey:iconfluffythemonkey:



Atop a hill not far from home
Brought here before
by guidance of roam.
`Still in sight was church and road
beyond which folk just never go’ed:
there hedge and hall and heart e’er grow’ed.

“But what abroad? But what abounds
in places no
man ever found?”
No answer would I ever get
a smile and polite “forget”:
those questions who still linger yet!

So climbed I that hill once again:
Ahead lay naught
but tree and fen,
rivers wide and cold and deep
which ran from hills and mountains steep
wherein none know what creatures creep.

Then: Lo! I cried, and down I dove
What journey awaits?
What treasure trove?
Not heeding prick of branch nor bramble
that tore my garbs into a shamble:
not like the paths that oft I amble!

Perhaps by dawn I’d find a castle
Ruled over once
by some lordly vassal;
Who dwelt here then? Elves, Dwarves, or Men?
Did they last long till timely end?
Or perish while they their lands defend?

Then traveling home t’wards stove and steam,
T’wards panes that in
the morning gleam;
Too soon! no doubt I’d hear myself say
by the longing I felt for ever to stay
but no lie: I’d be glad to on my bed lay.

Of my trip I’d tell all who cared
To perch on a stool
or plunk down in a chair.
“Them books, your head with ideas fill:
There be no Elves, and never will!”
says those who’ve never crossed that hill.
©2006-2009 ~fluffythemonkey
:iconfluffythemonkey:

Author's Comments

Not exactly the final draft. If you don't go on adventures, you might as well ignore this, because it won't mean a thing to you.

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:iconmisaniovent:
man ever found?

That line seems to short. I'd change it to "man has ever found".


those questions who still linger yet!

Who to that, perhaps?

Good though. I like this plenty.

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Hide the past!
:iconaliar:
There be no Elves, and never will!
says those who’ve never crossed that hill.

this is my favorite. and i aggree with missy on those lines.

we will soon be able to sing this song in truth. well, i can, but not that much. just a quick sword fight by a river.

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we're hanging our ankles
:iconfluffythemonkey:
The second and third lines of a stanza are split for merely aesthetic reasons. If you combine them, they make a series of eight two-beat, short-long pairs, just like every other line in the poem. I don't know what you call that, so if you know, please tell.
:iconmisaniovent:
I certainly see what you mean, but it just doesn't really sound right for some reason.

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Hide the past!
:iconplejaren:
wow, i want to go there now.
i love the last of it

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